Friday, January 9, 2016
One year ago, I took my English IV class which was useful for me and probably the most difficult that I had taken, indeed. The course started in January, in those times I used to be shy and it wasn't good in a career about language and communication. As you know a good decision in a good time helps you a lot, so everything changed in the first week.
The deal was all the students had to speak with a classmate, exlplain about them, their background and about their dreams, just to practice. Certainly everyone had different things to share with the another one, and my classmate was a woman. I remember most her presentation because it was brilliant, her speaking was completely good, and I was scared about mine. What will she think about my work?
I can remember her words clearly. She was Carolina. She was 19 and single as well. She lived in Tlaxcala (a state near to Puebla) with her family, she told me about them. Her parents were together, they had 4 kids including her. She had 2 sisters and 2 brothers and nieces and nephews too. I think she was happy, I could see that into her eyes. She used to enjoy the career and she told me that she loved the English language. One of her dreams was to be an English teacher because she thought that a good professor could improve the ideas of their students and would get better; another one was to practice skydiving someday.
In that exercise we had to switch the classmates to speak with other however, the another one the second mate, had to exlpain about the first partner. The next girl was Anaì. Before she started to speak, I heard a voice in my head, it was my mind. I knew all. I had to speak and like I said it needed to be better than the last time that I spoke. And I did!. I forced to myself to speak better, so the another girl was completely amazed by my speaking. That was my decision, I took it in the perfect time and since that moment I started to improve, and give me up isn`t a option and it'll never be. I wanted to share with you my experience
If you had the choice... What would be yours??
If you had the choice... What would be yours??
BY XIVIS :D
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Hi Silvia !
ResponderEliminarI loved your writing because your vocabuly is different and your grammar is better. I really enjoyed read it. I did not know the meaning of some words such as : switch , indeed and mate . After I realized that they were synonymous. Although you have some problems For example in your frist paragraph you wrote :
in those times I used to be shy and it wasn't good in a career about language and communication.
You must remenber that a preposition must have a coma if before of it there is a subject.
You change the subject it instead of she because you are refering about your troubles in the major.
The most commun is use major or degree instead of career .
In your second paragraph you wrote:
Exlplain about them. It is correct but in this case , you can use the reflexive pronouns . Themselves instead of them.
With the another one , another correct form is : with each other.
it was brilliant instead of She was brillant.
your last paragraph this sentence is a little complicate to understand for me :
we had to switch the classmates to speak with other however, the another one the second mate, had to exlpain about the first partner.
I suppose that you want to write this :
We had to switch information of first classmate to another mate.
In general your writing is correct.
yeah in many cases you're right
Eliminarthank's :D